Wednesday, November 12, 2014

Exploration 7 Mason Metcalf

1. In chapter 6 of our book I found a few things that were crucial to the chapter. The thing that stood out to me the most was the first paragraph on page 173. It states that "Public Documents can tell us a lot about the culture we're living in." It also talks about how this "writing links individuals to a social institution."

2. The document that I am responding to is Stimulate The Economy-Forgive Student Loans. This is sponsored by Kevin M. Bartoy and its target is President Obama. The purpose of the writing is to persuade Obama and the government to "forgive" the debts of college students so that they can invest in the future by creating new business and new jobs. I think this was a somewhat effective piece. Its purpose seems to be reasonable but I think they need to add more examples and also need to have more then a Facebook page as its only real communication. Some of the evidence used was how families pay upwards of a third to hold of their monthly incomes trying to pay off student debt. I think there writing is the best in the third paragraph. This paragraph is very powerful. they are confident but also back themselves up. "We provide the the best education in the world in our colleges and universities, but we leave our graduates at a severe disadvantage as they leave our institutions with a degree and a mountain of debt."

6 comments:

  1. I really agree with you on this. If a ggroup wants to really move to get something done or accomplished they need to actually work for it. They need to get more than only a facebook page. i did not think this was very effective because it lacked the info needed to convey what they are doing.

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  2. I agree with the end of your post saying what part was the most powerful. I too think that it was a very strong statement in the end because it perfectly describes how the current situation is.

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  3. Mason-
    I really enjoyed reading your response to the article. I completely agree with your last statement in which you talk about the paragraph with the most powerful writing. I completely agree with you because that statement is similar to my beliefs.

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  4. That was a very powerful section of writing you quoted, and I really liked it too. It kind of sums up everything about why jobs are so stressful and/or difficult to find in todays society. Do you think we could also blame the Universities for such high tuition cost? I have never done research on this, but I'm curious to see why some Universities believe a 60,000 dollar tuition is necessary.

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  5. I agree with you when you said it was a somewhat effective piece. They could have definitely added more examples of how this would help students. Sure they wouldnt have the debt to deal with, but what exactly could/would they do with the money that they save? I also agree with the fact that they need some other form of communication instead of just a facebook page, maybe an email or a telephone number.

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  6. I think that the piece of writing asking Obama to forgive student debts made some good reasons on why he should forgive them. I think the argument being made about how people can't reach their full potential because they are worrying about paying their debts is really convincing.

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